8 thoughts on “News on Deja Vu”

  1. For how long is the request open? My copy should be arriv­ing from Amazon @ the 16th. I don’t know how long a read it is but will be happy to com­ment if time hasn’t expired. (Or I haven’t.)

    Stargeezer

  2. First off, thanks for buy­ing a copy. Second, it will take many long months to edit the thing, so if it takes ages to you a while to get back to me, no prob­lem. I’d appre­ci­ate the feed­back.

  3. This sounds like great news. I’m very intrigued. I will get read­ing as soon as I’ve got my edit of the cur­rent WIP sor­ted. So if your tim­ing allows it…

    Roger.

  4. Ooh, I’m up to try for a signed copy… I thought the bike chase lead­ing to the air­port scene was very good. Lots of action, great pace, builds to a cres­cendo… fab.

    Looking back on it now, I think the final con­front­a­tion could have been a bit scar­i­er, a bit less messy in places. And the American diner annoys me: not enough descrip­tion.

    Aliya

  5. Thanks, Aliya! Yeah, I think the chase works OK. By final con­front­a­tion do you mean the bit where Hartfield reveals his dast­ardly plan (and oth­er twists)? Yes, the American diner is a little bor­ing as a place to set a scene. I might try for some­where a little more excit­ing (pity Rushmore has been done!)

  6. Yes, the Hartfield bit — sorry, am going from memory! Re the diner, I don’t know if it needs to be an inter­est­ing place, just that you need to slow it down and swing it back to char­ac­ter — maybe he could look at the oth­er people more, observe con­ver­sa­tions, think about his own life — I just get the feel­ing we need to see real life again there to remind us of the abnor­mal exper­i­ence he’s going through.

    I’ll go away now!

    Aliya

  7. Hmm! That cer­tainly ties in with one of my more neb­u­lous bul­let points, which is to give the read­er (and the char­ac­ters) a bit of space in which to absorb all the crazy stuff that’s going on. Thanks, Aliya.

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