This Writing Life
Writer and psychologist.
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For how long is the request open? My copy should be arriving from Amazon @ the 16th. I don’t know how long a read it is but will be happy to comment if time hasn’t expired. (Or I haven’t.)
First off, thanks for buying a copy. Second, it will take many long months to edit the thing, so if it takes ages to you a while to get back to me, no problem. I’d appreciate the feedback.
This sounds like great news. I’m very intrigued. I will get reading as soon as I’ve got my edit of the current WIP sorted. So if your timing allows it…
Thanks, Roger. It’s all a bit undecided at the moment. I’ll let you know how I get on…
Ooh, I’m up to try for a signed copy… I thought the bike chase leading to the airport scene was very good. Lots of action, great pace, builds to a crescendo… fab.
Looking back on it now, I think the final confrontation could have been a bit scarier, a bit less messy in places. And the American diner annoys me: not enough description.
Thanks, Aliya! Yeah, I think the chase works OK. By final confrontation do you mean the bit where Hartfield reveals his dastardly plan (and other twists)? Yes, the American diner is a little boring as a place to set a scene. I might try for somewhere a little more exciting (pity Rushmore has been done!)
Yes, the Hartfield bit — sorry, am going from memory! Re the diner, I don’t know if it needs to be an interesting place, just that you need to slow it down and swing it back to character — maybe he could look at the other people more, observe conversations, think about his own life — I just get the feeling we need to see real life again there to remind us of the abnormal experience he’s going through.
I’ll go away now!
Hmm! That certainly ties in with one of my more nebulous bullet points, which is to give the reader (and the characters) a bit of space in which to absorb all the crazy stuff that’s going on. Thanks, Aliya.
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